From AKAELA (the Mayake Chronicles Book 1), Prologue:
“Threeee!” I yell and dive off the cliff, wind whipping into my face.The above concludes the prologue of Akaela, my Sunday snippet submission for the Weekend writer Warriors (you can find the Snippet Sunday group on Facebook, too). Make sure you check out all Weekend writer Warriors participants, it's a fun way to find forthcoming books -- all genres welcome, there's something for everyone's tastes.
That moment when time stops, suspended in the breeze, that brief moment when I could crush down and die and yet I know I won’t.
That moment when I’m as alive as any creature could ever be. Because I feel.
And yet I’m not human. And I’m not robot.
I’m both.
You can read the beginning of the chapter up to this point here.
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I love that last lines. I'm intrigued to know more.
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year to you, too!! Can't believe it's only days away.
Wow. That begs the question: what is human if she feels? Great snippet, E.E. :)
ReplyDeleteOh my, does this one look good. Is it published now?
ReplyDeleteI love this prologue! :-)
Nice twist, Elena!
ReplyDeleteThose last lines have a definite impact---no pun intended! :)
"That moment when I’m as alive as any creature could ever be. Because I feel.
ReplyDeleteAnd yet I’m not human. And I’m not robot.
I’m both."
I love this for a somewhat complicated reason -- it reminds me of both Philip K. Dick and the web comic Artifice (which also reminds me of Philip K. Dick). In a lot of his books PKD dealt with the questions "What is life?" or "What is human/personhood?" which is also a theme in Artifice.
I should probably point out that comparing it to PKD is a huge compliment -- he is my all time favorite author.
wow, thanks so much ! I'll have to check him out! :-)
DeleteReally nice images and snippet.
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering if it would make sense to add a bit more physicality so we can feel the images and dive right into the moment with your character. I kind of wanted to feel her breath suspended by the breeze or something. Maybe that's just me.
Anyway, it's a nice snippet, which is probably why I want to get closer to it. ;)
the descriptions are earlier in the previous snippets (8 sentences at teh time!), but it's also true that this is a first draft, I'll definitely keep that in mind when I revise, thanks Ahelia!
DeleteGood stuff... Definitely hooks the reader.
ReplyDeleteCool snippet, and i lovelovelove that cover! Either alone could hook me and together they pack quite a punch.
ReplyDelete~Charley
Well that was just glorious and perfectly captured the moment! Wonderful snippet!
ReplyDeleteWow, that last line really caught my attention, and your description can't be beat.
ReplyDeleteGreat sensory details! and the closing lines are great. I'd be totally sucked into this story. (and btw awesome cover graphic)
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet. Loved the last three lines.
ReplyDeleteNice ... very nice ... a bit terminator'ish ... well done again on the description.
ReplyDeleteOh now that makes sense that she was going to jump, it still sounds dangerous but still safe. I can't even imagine the sensation she is getting from that.
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